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Cocktails, dinner and dancing to immediatly follow ceremony also at 33 Lynch Rd Lebabnon, CT


Hotel rooms reserved at the Courtyard Marriott in Norwich, CT under "Darby-Hudgens Wedding"


Marriot phone number ~ (860)-886-2600


Shuttle provided for wedding guests back to the Courtyard Marriott hotel after reception.


 


*This is my details card*

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:09 pm
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immediately--you forgot the "e"


remove the dash after (860)


if your reception and ceremony are in the same location, you don't need to write the address twice


The last sentence isn't a sentence. I'd reword it to something along the lines of "There will be a shuttle from the reception to the Courtyard Marriott for all wedding guests." If there is a certain time, add that detail in :)

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:14 pm
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Do you want proofing or suggestions?

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:16 pm
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Yes... thank you Anna.. that is exactly what I need!

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:20 pm
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first line not "to"...should be "will" really and I wouldn't include the address again


You don't like verbs...LOL....should really say "are reserved at"  Isn't the Name "Courtyard by Marriott?" I personally like spelling out city names in full as well as State names.


You might say, "Kindly or Please mention the Darby-Hudgens Wedding."


Put the Phone # after the Hotel, City and State


How about, "Shuttle service will be provided for hotel guests following the reception" or something like that.


I had real trouble with this secondary card as well...if you pm me with your email address I can attach ours to an email...let me know.

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:23 pm
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I think it should read:


"Cocktails, dinner and dancing immediately to follow ceremony"


But I don't think you even need that on your details card - I think it should go on the invite... I put "Dinner and merriment to follow" on the bottom of my invite since the ceremony and reception were at the same place.

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:25 pm
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Finn - Is the city, LebaBnon or Lebanon? You have LebaBnon on your card...

Posted on June 5, 2009 at 3:37 pm

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